Wednesday, 6 April 2016

Persuasive Writing

WALT: to persuade someone
This is my persuasive writing 
Evaluation: 

Feedforward: I think it is good but you could do more (Nikau)
target:

Should we have camp week every term?


Imagine the activities at camp week, kids republic, water day, art day, construction day and camp day. However, there are a couple of dangerous activities. I don't think we should have camp week every term.

I disagree because it costs to much and we won't have money for other important things for the school. Like kids republic it costs to much for rock climbing. We had Ozobots and we almost lost two of them but we found them. What if we didn't find them, we would have to pay $250 to get knew ones. The water rockets they broke them and now we don't have any for next term. 

It would be dangerous if we had a fire when we roasted marshmallows on the fire. Indeed its fun at kids republic but you could fall off something and hurt yourself and we don't have nurses at kids republic we may have a couple of plasters but thats not good enough. We would need a lot more than that.

I disagree with this statement because there are dangerous activities and it costs to much many!

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